Bill Gates is the person who I respect the most. He is successful in his career because of his persistence and hard-working. Born in a rich family and having a sister who is older than him, Gates had lived in a good environment. His parents are strict while at the same time respect them. Gates has a gift especially for math. Moreover, he has fallen in love with computer since he got in touch with it for the first time at the age of thirteen. Therefore, studying and digging into things related to computer system has been his lifelong interest.
He quit Harvard University without graduating and then created Microsoft with his friend. Never did them think that the company will be so successful and brilliant in the future. It goes without saying that in the process to success, he was faced with a lot of obstacles. For example, some software entrepreneur tried all they can to find out some reasons to defeat Gates. To be frank, Gates was confused and helpless at that time. Nevertheless, he took the challenge and keeps moving forward to ride out the difficulty.
There are many reasons result in his success. For instance, he spends a lot of time to communicate with others, trying to express his concepts to others clearly. He says that the biggest challenge is to find the best people and organize them, doing the best thing for the society and for people worldwide.
He is crazy about his job. In other words, he loves his job and he enjoys working. Others think that it’s too bitter for him to work all the time; however, he is happy to be busy. Gates says that he wants to be a person who will not regret for his goal and dream and that he will devote all his life in working. What attract me the most is that he doesn’t care about how much money he makes. On the contrary, he cares that whether he would be too old to come up with creative ideas.
Although he makes a great deal of money, he isn’t selfish at all. Unlike many successful people, Gates is devoted to charities all over the world, helping people who are suffered and live in a bad environment. I respect him from the bottom of my heart. He is an ideal model for me to learn something from. His perseverance, hard-working, creativity, and benevolence are what I lack and what I have to learn.
Dora, I enjoy reading your essay from last year to now. Your organization is so good and information is almost complete and detailed. My favorite part is the conclusion. The list of the person’s strengths that we should learn really encourages me.
回覆刪除In my opinion, in the second paragraph, to add some realistic data will make your essay more persuasive. Something like “There are 80% of people using software from Microsoft.” We want to know not only about his success but also how successful he is. I found some tiny grammatical mistakes, but they did not prevent me from reading this article. :D
By the way, I love this sentence-The biggest challenge is to find the best people and organize them. It is also what we have to overcome in writing- To find the best information (material) and organize them, right?
Dora:
回覆刪除As we know, Bill Gates is one of the most successful people in the world. We can know how influential and respectable he is and what he has done for society from your essay. You mentioned that Bill Gates doesn’t focus on how much money he makes but devote himself to charities all around the world. I think this is why people pay respect to Bill Gates because most wealthy people are too selfish to help the poor. I also like the sentence“Gates says that he wants to be a person who will not regret for his goal and dream and that he will devote all his life in working.” His ideal and values are so useful and worthy to follow. Your writing is really clear and interesting, and I learned a lot from it. Thanks for sharing!!!